ext_15440 ([identity profile] hello-spikey.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sevendeadlyfun 2009-01-10 07:31 pm (UTC)

So you had a plot hook, a nice problem to draw our characters forward together - find the lost slayer.

And it feels like it's already derailed. See, I'd like it if the confrontation with Giles was overlaid with action, if the scene could do two things at once - explore their issues and have a search begun.

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